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Dear all,
I understand how much you are busy, But any comment from your side will be highly appreciated . Fair enough, Ahmed, Ramadan takes its toll, I'm afraid

Forests are the lungs of the world. destruction of the forests amounts to death of the world we know it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that the green areas are the natural factories for oxygen. Damaging these factories will dramatically affect our world. This essay will examine the strong bond between forests' healthy status and our life in this world. (38) [Sensible opening Ahmed: short, simple and clear - well done!]

Forests are considered one of the living natural environments for many types of animals, fowls and insects. The woods are the natural home for all these type of creatures, and they can be considered as direct or indirect source of their food. All these creatures live in an amazing balance; even the strongest animal can not live independently without the weakest animal. And at the end the ?????????? [Yes it is going well, but you are two sentences short for this paragraph](78)

All the creators!!! are consuming oxygen continuously to generate the required energy for their daily lives, so carbon dioxide will be a result for this action. However, this gas is important for the plants to produce their food but it has two dangerous effects on the human beings' lives: firstly, this gas is a killer poison for the people. Secondly, increasing the carbon dioxide percentage in the atmosphere is enabling the air to act as a greenhouse, which leads to a dramatic rise in the earth's temperature, while also raising sea levels to the dangerous limits to threaten many coastal cities. (For instance that the people every where feel that the average of climate temperature is increased - this sentence is repetitive and meaningless, sorry!). [Hmmm, try not to get too technical Mr Mechanical Engineer - you are repeating yourself and using words incorrectly - all this brings your mark down. Rewrite this essay with my corrections and compare it to your original text]
(115)
In conclusion, although the development is the aim of civilization, which lead to product more carbon dioxide, but more investment to improve the forests must be the nations goal as it is the only tools keeping the stability of air containment limit, otherwise we will leave a damage environment to the next generations.(53) Ahmed, a 53-word sentence as a conclusion! You are making life very difficult for yourself and the examiner! Compare my conclusion below to yours:

In conclusion, we cannot stop progress, nor should we attempt to do so. We need to invest to protect the forests for our children's children by controlling greenhouse gas emissions. This must be our legacy, not a death sentence for the planet. (42 words / three sentences / strong message)
Total (284 words)

Ahmed Al-Qassab and Tony - have everybody else disappeared or given up? HELLO?

Ahmed, diagnose what is 'healthy' in this essay and what is 'sickly'. Unfortunately, I am seeing the SAME mistakes and WRONG strategy repeated. Keep it Short and Simple!!!.